I was very happy with my tutor feedback for assignment two! I had put a lot of preparation and research into this assignment and I learnt a huge deal from it, so my tutor’s comments were well received!
Below you will find some of my tutor’s positive comments.
“The image with the man and sign has so much energy, good use of selective focus here and the eye contact you have made with the man works well.” I really liked this image. I put a great deal of effort into practicing my selective focus with my telephoto lens and it really showed in this photo, and essentially, in this assignment as a whole.
“The final image is a good final image, it does look like the end. Great bright colours and sharp focus.” I loved this image and felt that it ended the assignment nicely; with the framing of the boat symbolising the end of the set of images well. The focus was again nice and sharp, and the colours really bounced out at the viewer.
Below you will find some aspects of my assignment that my tutor felt needed work, along with the changes made in accordance with these comments.
“In image four the depth of colour has been well captured. Your research into Capa’s grayscale technique works well although be aware that when you are going to print these images, if the background is too blown out it may prove tricky to hold the image.” This was a good point which I had thought about- but felt that it looked pleasing enough on screen. However, I decided to darken the exposure slightly in order to enable printing if necessary.
“Image five has nice focus! This is a real snap shot of the busy event, in a situation such as this hold your position and let the images work towards you, this shot almost feels like there is another shot waiting to be revealed. I like the way you are looking straight at the children, changing your angle of view is a way to change emphasis and sometimes see things that you couldn’t see before.” I agree that whilst I do like this image, it does look like there is another image to come; almost like this is the pre-shot to the actual one. The subjects were coming towards me quickly, and I simply had my 55-200mm telephoto lens. Therefore, the closer they got, the narrower wide-angle I was able to achieve, and thus I could not get them all in the frame for long enough to get two different exposures. Possibly a wider lens, or a more distant position would have been better.
For further reference, below you will find my tutor feedback in full.
A committed response to the assignment and you demonstrated good preparation and logistical organization by planning your position and observing the route of the event. Good work spending time on getting the focus right for this assignment, that more careful approach has really helped, keep working on this.
Your assignment presentation is clear and relevant, keep working in this way. Taking the time to practice and read up about different approaches is informing your work. You have created a body of work that tells a story. The images are bright and bold and really connect the viewer to the event.
Feedback on assignment Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of Creativity
Your pre-planning for this event was a good exercise to give you an understanding of the potential for image making. Some of your test shots look really interesting, the one where you are high up and you have captured the man on stilts is very pleasing with the single tone of the road in behind him and the white lines guiding your eye to the main focus.
Your final assignment images look great in colour and as you reflect this shows off the event to its best advantage. The first image is still a little soft on focus (although you have already noticed this) the moment is right. Slow down your practice and spend the time to watch the action and focus on the people.
The image with the man and sign has so much energy, good use of selective focus here and the eye contact you have made with the man works well. And your use of this selective focus in image three is also well demonstrated.
In image four the depth of colour has been well captured. Your research into Capa’s grayscale technique works well although be aware that when you are going to print these images, if the background is too blown out it may prove tricky to hold the image.
Image five has nice focus! This is a real snap shot of the busy event, in a situation such as this hold your position and let the images work towards you, this shot almost feels like there is another shot waiting to be revealed. I like the way you are looking straight at the children, changing your angle of view is a way to change emphasis and sometimes see things that you couldn’t see before.
Image six is nice and sharp, a bold image. Consider a variety of backgrounds, you can achieve this by getting lower or higher and again just changing your angle of view. The image seven does tell the story well. You have all the right elements on display, you could have even allowed wider framing? The main feature is so strong he didn’t have to be in the middle, you could have had more information on the left.
Images eight and nine capture the characters. The blue background works well and as you indicate, you notice his expression more than any other cropping issues. The man in the amazing outfit looks interesting and the background supports him, consider giving him a little more space to the left? It looks a little constricted.
The final image is a good final image, it does look like the end. Great bright colours and sharp focus.
Your images look well considered and thoughtful. This slowing down and preparation means you have presented a body of work. The lighting was good and the exposure of your images was suitable. This event would have been much more challenging if it had been a bright and harsh light, how you would have changed your approach for this? Look at the two photographers I have suggested and see how they light their work, their lighting does not appeal to everyone but it is another way of seeing.
Learning Logs or Blogs/Critical essays Context
Your blog is really starting to work well for you now. It is good to see your use of relevant critical theory and technical exploration used alongside your image making. Continue to use the Harvard referencing style as this is great practice and it will become second nature for you. Continue to reflect on your journey. You are starting to become very observant of elements of your own practice, this development will move you forward.
Suggested reading/viewing Context
Look at work by Martin Parr as he often follows events. Consider his message and how this is different from your own motivations. Anna Fox is also a photographer with a challenging view of the world. She uses a medium format camera so she is very noticeable to the people in the images.